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I unlock the serotonin chambers to
let my experiments out
so I can feel alive –
so I can feel human –
Then I fixate on them and
overanalyze – creating unusable theories
that will never become laws –

Please lock them away and
never let them out again –
they get in the way of my real work and
I’m left scared of myself –

This happens too often –
Decided to try some "science-y" imagery with this one. 
I'm not sure how else to say lines three and four as well. For the last line, I want to leave it as is, but I kinda think it sounds better if you switch the halves of the line :shrug:
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rainpeltkitty Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I really like this!
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XenoPluto Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2014  Student Writer
This is really quite good! It's not often science is incorporated in poetry, and it makes for a very original work. The cut-off technique, too, is quite effective :)
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MaladysMeadow Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
FUCK.YEAH. <3
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